For Backgroundbob #2

It’s quite hilarious, is it not?
That I, a mere stranger writes about you so
I dare not mock
But the deviousness of it all makes the giggles all the more flow
You see, I’ve been in deep cogitation
Wondering if I’d receive a poem just the same
For I am anxious, somewhat eager to know my victim’s name
After all, I do write about you
As if I was a familiar friend
You will be forever in thought
Upon what my motives are
And I will tell you yet again
I am just a person who delights in conspiracy--and no
That is not true, I delight in love and its powers
Raging against the unknown

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xanthan gum
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It’s quite hilarious, is it not?
That I, a mere stranger writes about you so
I dare not mock
But the deviousness of it all makes the giggles all the more flow
You see, I’ve been in deep cogitation
Wondering if I’d receive a poem just the same
For I am anxious, somewhat eager to know my victim’s name


this entire section lacks rhythm and structure - lines are long, then short, then extra long again. please revise that.


about the subject, i'd beg you to stop only for backgroundbob's sake. there is a line between cute and stalker, and you pass that when you turn about 15 or something, so... i'm not insulting you, he's a beautiful poet, but... these are just my personal opinions.

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Elizabeth
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I'm sorry but this scares me :P
You need new obsessions.
I'm kidding.

It was... a very weird.... very weird, piece... to say the least.
*Is scared*
Nice job on it though :)
*Is still scared*



You'd better wise up, Pony... you get tough like me and you don't get hurt. You look out for yourself and nothing can touch you, man.
— Dallas Winston, The Outsiders